Thoughts During the Downpour
by
Gregory K.
I always wished the rain away
And said “come back some other day.”
It worked real well, but now I fear
“Some other day”?
It's here.
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Monday, December 20, 2010
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4 comments:
Love this!
Great poem. I sometimes feel like that.
Love it. I just think that you should tweak your last line to
"Some other day, at last, is here." Or, "Some other day, alas, is here". # 1 is my pick. Both of those lines have 8 syllables. Your version has 8, 8, 8, 6. I think it would be perfect with 8, 8, 8,8.
Great job!
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