tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22755318.post3898486972342527318..comments2024-03-28T01:47:40.319-07:00Comments on GottaBook: Thoughts During the Downpour - a rainy day poemGreg Pincushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00449684160718426340noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22755318.post-83919249983937137822010-12-26T11:35:09.490-08:002010-12-26T11:35:09.490-08:00This comment has been removed by the author.Jessica Stanfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17663056640003914857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22755318.post-2981033929323573302010-12-26T11:34:58.189-08:002010-12-26T11:34:58.189-08:00Love it. I just think that you should tweak your l...Love it. I just think that you should tweak your last line to<br /> "Some other day, at last, is here." Or, "Some other day, alas, is here". # 1 is my pick. Both of those lines have 8 syllables. Your version has 8, 8, 8, 6. I think it would be perfect with 8, 8, 8,8.<br />Great job!Jessica Stanfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17663056640003914857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22755318.post-38953571347506249712010-12-22T15:49:04.965-08:002010-12-22T15:49:04.965-08:00Great poem. I sometimes feel like that.Great poem. I sometimes feel like that.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519655950073446857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22755318.post-91073813473848453922010-12-21T08:27:38.453-08:002010-12-21T08:27:38.453-08:00Love this!Love this!Sue Welfringerhttp://msuacademy.comnoreply@blogger.com